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读后续写：被困地窖求助小猫（教师版）一、原文TheChristmasholidayswerefastapproaching,andWehadorderedmanygiftsonline.So,whenthedoorbellrang,Iwassuresomeofthepackageshadarrived.Irantothedoorandswungitopen,butnoonewasthere.Isensedsomethingandlookeddown,onlytofindabeautifulcalicokitten（杂色猫）sittingthere,lookingupatmewithbig,intelligenteyes.Therewasnowaythatshecouldhaverungthedoorbellbyherself,wasthere?Wefiguredthatsomeonehadfoundthekittensomewhereandleftherthere,andthenrangthedoorbellandranaway.Theyaccuratelyguessedwewouldwelcomeanadditionalfamilymemberandtakecareofher.Myhusbandcalledherourlittleangel,soWenamedheraccordingly.Shehadacalmaura（气质）aboutherasshewalkedstraightintoourhomeandhearts,fittinginperfectly.Itseemedasifshewasalwaysmeanttobeinthisbighousewithus.Shewasanoldsoulandturnedouttobetheperfectcompanion.Alwaysbymyside,shewasmorelikeapuppythanakitten.Wisebeyondheryears,sheenjoyedwanderingthroughthetunnelsandmysteriousroomsasmuchasIdid,butwithmuchlessfear.Angelicathecalicowascourageous.So,Itookapagefromherbookanddecidedtobebrave,too.Therewasanundergroundstonecellar（地窖）Ihadbeeneagertoexplore.Theonlywayinwasdownarickety（摇晃的）laddertoitsmurkydepths.Iguesseditwasanoldrootcellar,probablytwelvefeetdeep.IhadpromisedmyhusbandthatIwouldn,texploredangerousareasunlessheorsomeoneelsewasaround.ThoughIknewIwasstretchingit,IfiguredthatAngelicawouldcountasmycompanion.Iwasreadytoexplorethiscellar,andsowasshe.Iequippedmyselfwithagoodflashlightandwarmclothes,andcarefullystarteddownthericketyladderwhileAngelicawaslookingdownatmefromabove.FaintcrackandsuddencrashwerewhatIcouldremember.ParagraPh1:1WozeWithPieCeSOftherotting,brokenIadderIyingClroUndmeCmtheStoneCeUarfloor.ParagraPh2:hSeemedZnycompanion,AngeliCa,HYZSmylasthope.二、审题思考1 .“我”发生了什么？我从梯子上摔了下来，受伤了（因为前面我昏迷了，肯定伤到了）2 .第二段段首句说明了什么？猫是我“最后”的希望，说明我无法和外界联络（原因可能是手机摔坏了/没带手机/手机没信号），还说明我无法靠自己的力量上去（原因是梯子坏的太彻底/受伤了）3 .“我”在地窖时猫在哪？在上面，没跟着我一起下去，因为猫必须在上面帮助我，如果猫和我一起下地窖了，那么猫还是得上去，所以没必要增加情节。4 .猫如何帮助我？重点就是我要怎么给猫传递信息，方法是我把已有的私人东西扔出地窖，猫叼着出去寻求帮助，最好扔衣服（具有明显个人特征）。不能扔手机，因为这不是原文中已有的东西。三、微情节设计Paragraph1:Iwokeupwithpiecesoftherotting,brokenladderlyingaroundmeonthestonecellarfloor.处境：梯子坏了+受伤了+无法和外界联络努力：大声呼救+墙壁太滑爬不上去小猫出现：听到啮嗡声，抬头看到小猫Paragraph2:Itseemedmycompanion,Angelica,wasmylasthope.这一段其实就是写自主脱险过程，很套路：灵机一动：想到主意，即可以借助衣服，让猫传递讯息采取行动：奋力扔衣服一听到衣服在地面上被拖动（摩擦）的声音越来越小，知道小猫已经get到信息搬救兵了等待一获救：等待时的感受，成功被救小猫是圣诞老人给的礼物，是让我脱离绝望的天使四、教师下水文短语1.痛苦的想起了apainfulreminderof/呼救5.空洞的回声thehollowingecho2.在漆黑中inthepitchdark6.某人想到itdawnedonsbthat,itstruckmethat3.出路wayout4.尖叫着求救screamforhelp7.让我伤心失tomybitter望的是disappointment8.绝望n.despair9.把某物往上照shinesthup10.一线希望aglimmerofhope11.在最后一次尝试中inalast-ditchattempt12.去找某人gofor13.救援我cometomyrescue14.静止standstill15.刺破piercethrough16.奇迹般地，miraculously/m不可思议地raekj1sli五、连词成篇IWoke忧DWithDieCeSOftherotting,brokenIadderIyingaroundontheStOneCeUarf100r.1.当我挪动时，我头部和背部的疼痛使我痛苦地想起了破碎的梯子，以及我被困在漆黑的地窖里没有出路的事实。infulreminderoftheThe；ch；nearmyheadandbackwhenIshiftedwasapabrokenladderandthefactthatIwastrappedinthepiitchdarkcellarwithwayout.2,我尖叫着求救，不幸的是，只有空洞的回声传回来。Iscreamedforhelp,unfortunately,onlythehollowingechosendingbacktome.3 .突然，我意识到我带了我的手机。Allofasudden,itdawnedmethatIhadbroughtmycellphone.4 .令人失望的是，信号太微弱，无法接收。tobeavailable.Tomyfitterdisappointment,thesignalwastoo5 .绝望即将吞噬我，这时传来微弱的啮啼声。Despairwasabouttoswallowmewhentherecameaweakmiaow.6 .把手电筒往上照，我可以看到安杰莉卡在地窖的边缘。Shiningtheflashlightup.IcouldseeAngelicasatontheedgeofthecellar.ItSeetnedAnycompanion,Angelica,wasmyIaSthope.1.她的勇敢给了我一线希望。Herpraverygaveme(glimmerofhope2 .所以在最后的尝试中，我脱下外套，把它扔给安吉莉卡。Soinalast-ditchattempt,Itookoffmycoat,lobbingittowardsAngelica.3 .“安杰莉卡，用这个布去叫我丈夫来救我。”我大声叫道。"Angelica,formyhusbandtocometomyrescuewiththeCIothIexclaimedloudly.4 .时间似乎静止了，直到沉重的脚步声穿透寂静的空气。Timeseemedtobestandstilluntilheavyfootfallspiercedthroughthesilentair.5 .不可思议的是，丈夫跟着安吉莉卡来到我身边，成功地把我从地窖里拉了出来。iraculousl,myhusbandfollowedAngelicatomysideandmanagedtopullutofthecellar.6 .温柔地抚摸着她的皮毛，我突然想到这只漂亮的印花布小猫是圣诞老人的守护天使。Strokingherfurtenderly,itstruckmethatthisbeautifulcalicokittenwasaguardianangelfromSanta.范文：Iwokeupwithpiecesoftherotting,brokenladderIyinRaroundmeonthestonecellarfloonrhethrobbingachenearmyheadandbackwhenIshiftedwasapainfulreminderofthebrokenladderandthefactthatIwastrappedinthepitchdarkcellarwithnowayout.Iscreamedforhelp,unfortunately,onlythehollowingechosendingbacktome.Allofasudden,itdawnedonmethatIhadbroughtmycellphone.Bitterlydisappointed,thesignalwastoofanittopickup.Desparationwasabouttoswallowmewhentherecameaweakmew.Shiningtheflashlightup,IcouldseeAngelicaperchedherselfontheedgeofthecellar.ItSeemedmycompanion,AngeliCa,卬asmyIaSthope.Herbraverygavemeaglimmerofhope.Soinalast-ditchattempt,Itookoffmycoat,lobbingittowardsAngelica.''Angelica,goformyhusbandtocometomyrescuewiththecloth.,Iexclaimedloudly.Timeseemedtobestandstilluntilheavyfootfallspierecedthroughthesilentair.Miraculouly,myhusbandfollowedAngelicatomysideandmanagedtopullmeoutofthecellar.Strokingherfurtenderly,itstruckmethatthisbeautifulcalicokittenwasaguardianangelfromSanta.被困地窖求助小猫（学生版）一、原文TheChristmasholidayswerefastapproaching,andWehadorderedmanygiftsonline.So,whenthedoorbellrang,Iwassuresomeofthepackageshadarrived.Irantothedoorandswungitopen,butnoonewasthere.Isensedsomethingandlookeddown,onlytofindabeautifulcalicokitten（杂色猫）sittingthere,lookingupatmewithbig,intelligenteyes.Therewasnowaythatshecouldhaverungthedoorbellbyherself,wasthere?Wefiguredthatsomeonehadfoundthekittensomewhereandleftherthere,andthenrangthedoorbellandranaway.Theyaccuratelyguessedwewouldwelcomeanadditionalfamilymemberandtakecareofher.Myhusbandcalledherourlittleangel,sowenamedheraccordingly.Shehadacalmaura（气质）aboutherasshewalkedstraightintoourhomeandhearts,fittinginperfectly.Itseemedasifshewasalwaysmeanttobeinthisbighousewithus.Shewasanoldsoulandturnedouttobetheperfectcompanion.Alwaysbymyside,shewasmorelikeapuppythanakitten.Wisebeyondheryears,sheenjoyedwanderingthroughthetunnelsandmysteriousroomsasmuchasIdid,butwithmuchlessfear.Angelicathecalicowascourageous.So,Itookapagefromherbookanddecidedtobebrave,too.Therewasanundergroundstonecellar（地窖）Ihadbeeneagertoexplore.Theonlywayinwasdownarickety（摇晃的）laddertoitsmurkydepths.Iguesseditwasanoldrootcellar,probablytwelvefeetdeep.IhadpromisedmyhusbandthatIwouldn,texploredangerousareasunlessheorsomeoneelsewasaround.ThoughIknewIwasstretchingit,IfiguredthatAngelicawouldcountasmycompanion.Iwasreadytoexplorethiscellar,andsowasshe.Iequippedmyselfwithagoodflashlightandwarmclothes,andcarefullystarteddownthericketyladderwhileAngelicawaslookingdownatmefromabove.FaintcrackandsuddencrashwerewhatIcouldremember.ParagraPh1:1WozeWithPieCeSOftherotting,brokenIadderIyirIgaroundmeOntheStoneCellarf100r.ParagraPh2:hSeemedZnycompanion,AngeliCa,HYZSmylasthope.二、审题思考1 .“我”发生了什么？2 .第二段段首句说明了什么？3 .“我”在地窖时猫在哪？4 .猫如何帮助我？三、微情节设计Paragraph1:Iwokeupwithpiecesoftherotting,brokenladderlyingaroundmeonthestonecellarfloor.Paragraph2:Itseemedmycompanion,Angelica,wasmylasthope.1.痛苦的想起了2.在漆黑中3.出路4.尖叫着求救/呼救5,空洞的回声6.某人想到7.让我伤心失望的是8.绝望n.9.把某物往上照四、教师下水文短语10.一线希望11.在最后一次尝试中12.去找某人13.救援我14.静止15.刺破16.奇迹般地，不可思议地五、连词成篇IM)OkeUDWithDieCeSOftherotting,Im)kenICIdderlyingaroundIneOntheStoneCeIlarflooK(1)当我挪动时，我头部和背部的疼痛使我痛苦地想起了破碎的梯子，以及我被困在漆黑的地窖里没有出路的事实。ThenearmyheadandbackwhenIwasaofthebrokenladderandIwastrappedinthecellarwith(2)我尖叫着求救，不幸的是，只有空洞的回声传回来。I,unfortunately,onlytheme.(3)突然，我意识到我带了我的手机。Allofasudden,methatIhadbroughtmycellphone.(4)令人失望的是，信号太微弱，无法接收。Tomy,thesignalwastootobeavailable.(5)绝望即将吞噬我，这时传来微弱的嘴啮声。wasabouttomewhen(6)把手电筒往上照，我可以看到安杰莉卡在地窖的边缘。,IcouldseeAngelicasatthecellar.ItSeemednyCOmPanion,Angelica,HYZSmyIaSthope.(1)她的勇敢给了我一线希望。Hergaveme(2)所以在最后的尝试中，我脱下外套，把它扔给安吉莉卡。So,Itookoffmycoat,ittowardsAngelica.(3)“安杰莉卡，用这个布去叫我丈夫来救我。”我大声叫道。"Angelica,myhusbandtowiththe.“Iexclaimedloudly.(4)时间似乎静止了，直到沉重的脚步声穿透寂静的空气。Timeseemedtobeuntilheavythesilentair.(5)不可思议的是，我丈夫跟着安吉莉卡来到我身边，成功地把我从地窖里拉了出来。,myhusbandfollowedAngelicatomysideand(6)温柔地抚摸着她的皮毛，我突然想到这只漂亮的印花布小猫是圣诞老人的守护天使。herfur,thisbeautifulcalicokittenwasafrom