读后续写主题“人与社会”主题语境下的“良好的人际关系和社会交往”写作解析讲义.docx

读后续写主题“人与社会”主题语境下的“良好的人际关系和社会交往”写作解析一、试题意现阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语段续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。MydaughterGinawasinMrs.Me1.ton'sfourthgradec1.ass.Afteron1.yamonthinschoo1.,shebegantocomehomeonaregu1.arbasisaskingforpenci1.s,crayons（蜡学）,paper,etc.AtfirstIjustdutifu1.1.yprovidedwhateversheneeded,neverquestioningher.Thiswentonforweeks.Ibecameconcernedandaskedher,"Gina,whatareyoudoingyou,reyourschoo1.things?"Shewou1.da1.waysrespondwithanswersthatsatisfiedme.Oneday,aftersupp1.yingabrandnewerasertoheron1.ythreedaysear1.ier,Ibecameannoyedandangri1.yaskedheroncemore.Knowingherexcuseswou1.dno1.ongerwork,shebentherheadandbegantocry.I1.iftedhertinychinand1.ookedintothosehigbrowneyes,fi1.1.ednowwithtears.Iwaitedimpatient1.yforhertoanswer.,Mum,thereisaboynamedJohninmyc1.ass.Hedoesn,thaveanyoftheschoo1.thingsheneedstodohiswork.Otherkidsteasehimbecausehispapersaremessyandheon1.yhastwocrayonstoco1.orwith.Secret1.y,I'vebeenputtingthenewschoo1.thingsyouboughtmeonhisdesk,"Ginaexp1.ainedwithwateryeyes.MyheartsankasIstoodthereindisbe1.ief.Shehadtakenonthero1.eofanadu1.tandtriedtohideit1.ikeachi1.d.Ikne1.tdownandhuggedhertome,notwantinghertoseemyowntears.WhenIpu1.1.edmyse1.ftogether,Istoodupandsaid,*,Gina,Iwou1.dnevergetmadatyouforwantingtohe1.psomeone,butwhydidn,tyoujustcomeandte1.1.me?"Ididn'twaitforhertoanswer.ThenextdayIvisitedMrs.Me1.tonandto1.dherwhatGinahadsaid.Ithen1.earntthatjohn,sfami1.yhadjustmovedhere.Johnwasthee1.destoffourboysandtheirparentswerestrugg1.ingtomakeendsmeet.Gettingschoo1.thingsfortheboyswasnottheirpriority.注意：1 .续写词数应为150左右.：2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.WithChristmasdrawingnear,Ibecameincreasing1.yconcernedaboutJohnandhisfami1.y._Thenextmorning,wesetoutforJohn'shome.二、试题分析（一）文本信息< 1）主起：“人与社会”主题语境下的"良好的人际关系和社会交往一（2）体裁:记叙文。（3）题材：和孩子一起常助困难同学< 4）文章字数：356个单词（包含续写段首句）。< 5）文章大就：本文讲述了作者的女儿Gina偷偷将自己新买的文具送给班上缺乏文具的同学John,以招助他免受其他同学的嘲笑，而作者在得知真相后既感动又自炎没有早点了解情况。（二）解题思路（1）故事解读1.记叙文要素E1.ementsDetai1.sWhoI,mydaughterGina1John,Johnsfami1.y,Mrs.Me1.tonWhenInfourthgrade:afteramonthInschoo1.weeks1.ateronedaythenextdaywithChristmasdrawingnearthenextmorningWhereathomeatschoo1.inJohn,shomeWhyGinafrequent1.yaskingfornewschoo1.thingswithoutte1.1.ingmetherea1.reason.WhatGinafrequent1.yaskingforschoo1.thingswithoutte1.1.ingmetherea1.reason,1.eadingmetogetannoyed.Afterknowingthesituation,Idecidedtohe1.pJohnwithGina.2 .故事发展线Beginning(Para.1)：Ginafrequent1.yaskingforschoo1.things.RisingAction(Para.2):Ibecameconcernedaboutherandgotmadatherforherexcuses.C1.imax(Para.3&4&5)：I1.earnedabouttherea1.reasonherGina,sabnorma1.behaviorandthedifficu1.tyofJohn,sfami1.y.So1.ution：待续Conc1.usion：待续3 .情感发展线1: norma1.(atfirst)concerned(thiswentonforweeks)annoyed/angry(aftersupp1.yingabrandnewerasertoGinaon1.ythreeweeksear1.ier)impatient(Ginabentherheadandbegantocry)heartsank/indisbe1.ief(afterGinaexp1.ainedtometherea1.reason)movedandgui1.ty(afterrea1.izingGina'skindnessandmymisunderstanding)sympathetic(after1.earningaboutJohn'sdifficu1.tsituation)concerned(withChristmasdrawingnear)-Gina:sympathetic(seeingJohn'sawkwardsituation)nervous(askingmefornewschoo1.thingsandbeingaskedthereason)worriedandpanicky(seeingmegettingannoyedandangri1.yaskherthereasononcemore)re1.ieved(rea1.izingIsupportedandunderstandher)concerned(knowingthedifficu1.tsituationjohn,sfami1.ywasin).4 .人物特征I：sympathetic,kindGina：compassionate,eagertohe1.p5 .文章主题：同情心和善良(2)续写构思续写第一段首句“班若圣诞节的日益临近，我对约翰和他的家庭感到越来越担忧针对第一段续写情节我们可以提出以下问题：为什么圣诞节的临近会让我愈发担忧约翰和他的家庭？为了解除这种担忧我提出什么方案？(3)Gina对此方案作何反应？根据“螭决问时原则"和续写第二段首句"第二天清晨我们踏I1.了前往约翰家的路途"可知续写第一段的恬节可以是：这个对于许多人来说充满欢乐和团聚的节日，对于约翰一家来说,却可能充满了挑战和不易。他们的经济状况直不太乐观，而节日的额外开销无疑会让他们的日子更加艰难.我提出我们可以趁著圣诞节为约翰家准备圣诞礼物，包括学习用品和家庭自制食物.Gina感到又惊又喜，立刻着手写下礼物清单，准备礼物，根据“解决问捌原则"、"止能量原则"和"符合文章主题原则"，结局是我们在圣诞节前一天把圣诞礼物送到约翰家,约翰一家又惊讶又感激.而我们也因为帮助了约翰一家而感到开心和满足。再结合续写第二段首句"第二天清晨，我们踏上了前往约翰家的路途”,针对第二段续写情节我们可以提出以下：我们去约翰家做什么？路上是什么心情和感受？约翰和他的家人看到我们的到访是什么心情和反应？最后主题升华是什么？回答问题可知续写第二段的情节可以是：我们带着圣诞礼物去约翰家，路上既期待又紧张.约翰和家人对我们的到访充满/惊讶、激动和感激的发杂心情，体现“同情心和善IV的主题升华.(3)*考他文1WithChristmasdrawingnear,Ibecameincreasing1.yconcernedaboutJohnandhisfami1.y.Thethoughtofthemspendingtheho1.idayseasonwithoutthebasicnecessities,1.eta1.onegifts,weighedheavi1.yonmyheart.IknewIhadtodosomething,so1suggestedorganizingasecretSantaforJohnandhisbrothers.Hearingthat,Ginajumpedexcited1.yandthengotdowntomakinga1.istofgiftssuchasc1.othes,toys,andschoo1.supp1.iestheydesperate1.yneeded.Wea1.soinc1.udedafewextratreatstomaketheirChristmasa1.itt1.ebrighter.ThenightbeforeChristmaseve,wewrappedeverythingupwithcare,eachgift1.abe1.edwithapersona1.izedmessageof1.oveandencouragement.Thenextmorning,wesetoutforohn,shome.Asweapproachedtheirmodesthouse,Icou1.dseeamixtureofexpectationandnervousnessinGina,seyes.Gatheringcourage,Weknockedonthedoor.John'smotheranswered,1.ookingsurprisedtoseeu$.Weexp1.ainedourmissionandshequick1.yinvitedusinside,wheretheboyswere."MerryChristmas!"Wehandedoverthegifts.John'sface1.itupwithpurejoyandhisbrothersscreamedexcited1.y,theireyesshiningwithgratitude.Ginawatched,asmi1.espreadingacrossherfaceasshesawtheimpactofherkindnessmu1.tip1.ied.ItwasthenIrea1.izedthepowerofcompassionandthejoycomingfromgiving.参考范文2WithChristmasdrawingnear,Ibecameincreasing1.yconcernedaboutJohnandhisfami1.y.Howwou1.dtheyspendChristmasthroughtoughtime?Sure1.ytheywou1.dnothavemoneyforgifts.Consideringthis,mymindwassetonhe1.pingthem.Therefore,Ito1.dGinathatinsteadoftheusua1.giftexchange,Wewou1.dgoshoppingtose1.ectsomegiftsforJohn'sfami1.y.Onhearingmyp1.an,Gina'seyesspark1.edwithde1.ight.Shecou1.dn'twaittochoosethingsforthem.Exhaustedbutexcited,wereturnedhomewithnecessitiestheywou1.dneedandcarefu1.1.ywrappedthegifts.Thenextmorning,WesetoutforJohn'shome.Uponarriving,GinaandIcarefu1.1.yp1.acedthewrappedgiftsanddecorationsontheirdoorstep,ourheartspoundingwithexcitement.Weknockedonthedoorandhurriedbacktoourcar,ho1.dingourbreathtowaitfortheirreaction.Seeingtheirfaces1.itupwithsurpriseandjoy,Iknewwehadmadearightdecision.Ginaneverto1.dasou1.inschoo1.aboutWhatwedid.Anyhow,wehopedthatoursma1.1.kindnesscou1.dbringsomejoyandwarmthtotheirChristinas,andbrightentheir1.ivesinthefuture.